If you have pieces of your broken heart,
Then you still have a chance to live,
If you have soul that smiles from the inside,
Than you still have a world to give.
If you deserve to own your life,
If your troubles are away,
Than you will hear a symphony,
It has a sign that leads the way.
Still we are fighting for the kings,
And only love will win this war,
But there are so many broken hearts,
And I think we don’t need more.
leads the way, not "lids"...
deserve + direct object (with no prepositions)
your own life - not own your ...(it is unacceptable) or the life of your own (in postposition). dear auther, I noticed those mistakes in "Lira". Yet, nice to meet U
Ярослав Клочник відповів на коментар $previous_title_comm, 01.01.1970 - 03:00
гарний вірш, дозволю тут собі зацитувати Павличка:
Мені нагадують людські серця
крихке й тоненьке серце олівця:
зламати - легко, застругати - важче, списати - неможливо до кінця...
Ярослав Клочник відповів на коментар $previous_title_comm, 01.01.1970 - 03:00
Якщо маєш щось на шевченківську тематику - тобі сюди:
